Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

Nowadays different
countries
are open with
business
as well as cultural contact.Investment in
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Industrialisation
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more often a trend in nearby
countries
.
Acient
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history shows that
business
activities between
countries
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been done a long time ago.
For example
in Asia China Indonesia and Malaysia has proven that
barter
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system
take
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place as well as Spain and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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.In
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present
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day since
industrilitation
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industrialisation
industrialization
and
aggresive
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aggressive
inovation
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innovation
in
bussiness
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business
. Different
countries
supports
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business
development in
such
a way of investing in import and export
business
.Cultural contact is evident since other
countries
need
foriegn
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foreign
workers to
fill-up
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there
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labor
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workforce
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work force
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.Workers from other
countries
introduce
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cultural ways.
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some believe that national identity
dissappear
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disappear
on
this
way,
for
example
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more imported goods and brand will boast in the
bussiness
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business
local
entrepnuer
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entrepreneur
will suffer most.
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