The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many
people
continue their smoking habit after knowing the dangers of it. There are many causes of
consumption
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the consumption
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of
cigarette
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cigarettes
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.
Such
as
,
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apply
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lungs
cancer
, mouth
cancer
, throat
cancer
and many other major diseases.
People
smoke cigarettes just because they are very much addicted
of
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to
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it and some youngsters smoke
it
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them
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for
thier
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their
fun or relaxation. But they do not know the actual dangers
cause
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caused
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of
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by
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cigarette
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cigarettes
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.
Nicotin
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Nicotine
- a drug uses in
making
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the making
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of
cigarette
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cigarettes
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which can easily addict humans, and because of that drug
people
continue smoking and it affects starting from
thier
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their
the
mouth to lungs which can lead them to the deadliest
diseases
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disease
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called
cancer
.
However
, there are many ways
people
can quit their smoking habit. But
first
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,first
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the
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they
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should be mentally strong, they should be involved in
such
activities and they should be very much concerned about their health.
Secondly
, there are many products are available in the market which can help
people
to reduce their smoking habit.
Also
, there are certain fruits do the same effect
over
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human
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humans
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to quit smoking.
Moreover
, Government should ban tobacco products and fine charges if
people
still continue
it's
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use. Smoking is
the
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a
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major issue in
this
world nowadays. In the recent survey, it has announced that 85% population in
this
world smokes cigarettes on
their
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a
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daily basis and 58% of
them
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the
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dead
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died
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because of
lungs
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lung
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and throat
cancer
.
People
should understand the value of their lives and try not to smoke and
also
help others too for the same thing.
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