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State your opinion: Should kids be allowed to have money at a young age?

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 should be allowed to have
money
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 with a limit.
Kids
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 should be taught how to manage
money
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 from a young
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 so it does not become an issue in the future. Most people nowadays have shopping problems and don'
t
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 know how to manage their
money
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 because they were not trained to from a young
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. People go around spending
money
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 they don'
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 have
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 of saving up. I think
kids
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 from ages seven and eight should be allowed a monthly allowance and learn how to spend it properly. I
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 believe that
kids
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 should be introduced to taxes and how you pay them. You see, schools don'
t
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 teach
kids
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 any of
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 and I think it's absurd.
Kids
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 would turn into young adults,
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 adults, and
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 they
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 have to learn it on their own when
school
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 could've taught them at an earlier
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 and made them ready for the future.
Money
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, as we all know is one of the most important aspects of life.
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, you need
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 to afford food, a home, or a car. Basically, you need
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 to live, and if you don'
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 know how to manage it, you won'
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 get far or anywhere really. Knowing how to spend your
money
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 correctly is very important as it helps you prioritize your expenses. Learning to manage it from a young
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 trains your brain to prioritize what you need and what you don'
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. To achieve
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, parents should assign
kids
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 chores and pay them as a reward for completing them. After a month of chores, parents can take their
kids
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 to the toy store for a mini spree. With
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,
kids
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 will not only learn to value and save up his/her
money
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 but
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 be
practicing
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 math, self-control, and how to prioritize expenses.
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 way,
kids
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 will
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 learn that if they work hard there will be a reward at the end of the road. In conclusion, I think that
kids
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 must be allowed
money
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 at a young
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, and for a person to become successful with handling
money
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 they should be trained from a young
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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