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State your opinion: Should kids be allowed to have money at a young age?

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Kids
 should be allowed to have
money
 with a limit.
Kids
 should be taught how to manage
money
 from a young
age
 so it does not become an issue in the future. Most people nowadays have shopping problems and don'
t
 know how to manage their
money
 because they were not trained to from a young
age
. People go around spending
money
 they don'
t
 have
instead
 of saving up. I think
kids
 from ages seven and eight should be allowed a monthly allowance and learn how to spend it properly. I
also
 believe that
kids
 should be introduced to taxes and how you pay them. You see, schools don'
t
 teach
kids
 any of
this
 and I think it's absurd.
Kids
 would turn into young adults,
then
 adults, and
then
 they
finally
 have to learn it on their own when
school
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 could've taught them at an earlier
age
 and made them ready for the future.
Money
, as we all know is one of the most important aspects of life.
For example
, you need
money
 to afford food, a home, or a car. Basically, you need
money
 to live, and if you don'
t
 know how to manage it, you won'
t
 get far or anywhere really. Knowing how to spend your
money
 correctly is very important as it helps you prioritize your expenses. Learning to manage it from a young
age
 trains your brain to prioritize what you need and what you don'
t
. To achieve
this
, parents should assign
kids
 chores and pay them as a reward for completing them. After a month of chores, parents can take their
kids
 to the toy store for a mini spree. With
this
,
kids
 will not only learn to value and save up his/her
money
 but
also
 be
practicing
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 math, self-control, and how to prioritize expenses.
This
 way,
kids
 will
also
 learn that if they work hard there will be a reward at the end of the road. In conclusion, I think that
kids
 must be allowed
money
 at a young
age
, and for a person to become successful with handling
money
 they should be trained from a young
age
.
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