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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. what problems does this shortage case? what measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

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Water
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 is a basic need of every person and it’s obligatory for State to provide
water
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 to its citizen, unfortunately as far as the days are passing, the need for clean
water
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 is creating an international issue
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 grows the significance.
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 essay will discuss the problem and what we need to do to resolve the
problems
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.
Firstly
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, it is a fact that the world is facing the
problems
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 of freshwater which is now spreading very fast and due to the shortage, the people are facing several
problems
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 like increase in different kind of diseases, production of fruits and vegetables.
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, due to the insufficiency of
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water
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 disease like abdomen, kidney and lungs so
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 the heart is increasing.
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 about 60% of the total population of the world are in facing the problem of clean
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 ,
unfortunately
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 they are getting sick by drinking dirty
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 and has suffered from different illnesses.
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, due to lack of
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 the vegetables and fruits are becoming poisonous and creating hurdles to the consumers.
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, it is the duty of every state to prove the better facilities to its citizen and due to the carelessness of the leaders of the countries, the world is facing
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freshwater
problems
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. Now there are some solutions
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 can overcome the freshwater issue.
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, the Government of every state should allocate the budget to build the dams near to the rivers to reserve the
water
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 and
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 the same can be provided to citizens and to supply for gardens. Another point is that they
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 need to construct plants that purify the
water
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 so that the life of the people can be saved from different diseases.
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, a survey was conducted by the university students on clean
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, the result shows that the purified
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 removes bacteria, germs from the
water
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 which becomes drinkable after the process of purification. In conclusion, a shortage of clean
water
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 can cause a lot of health
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 including heart
problems
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. The most effective way to overcome the
problems
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 is to save
water
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 in a different way and provide it by purifying.
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