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Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper any more. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is universally accepted that in light of the proliferation of online information channels, convention
newspapers
 have been on the wane, and considered no longer necessary.
Although
 online
news
 is indeed superior to
printed
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 in many facets, I believe that printed papers would never be replaced completely. It is understandable why some
people
 advocate eschewing paper publications in
favor
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 of their digital versions. The key rationale behind
this
 development is that reading
news
 online is infinitely speedier.
Instead
 of purchasing papers at a newsstand,
people
 can now access
news
 updates immediately via Internet-connected mobile devices. Another justification is that online
news
 is virtually free of charge. Most e-papers do not charge readers, which discourages many
people
 from buying printed materials. Notwithstanding the aforementioned benefits of internet-based
newspapers
, I am of the opinion that there are several compelling reasons as to why printed
news
 cannot be dispensed with.
Firstly
, some
people
 prefer traditional
newspapers
.
For example
, the elderly, who are not used to reading
news
 on a digital screen due to their poor vision, often gravitate towards printed publications.
Furthermore
, the disappearance of printed
news
 may have a far-reaching effect on a host of industries.
For instance
, the declining demand for paper
news
 may force publishers and logging companies to downsize, which could trigger mass unemployment. In conclusion, despite
undeniable
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 benefits of online
newspapers
, I am convinced that conventional
news
 still has an important role to play in modern society.
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