Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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Since we are living in the era of technology , companies use advertising to introduce their
products
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to the public.
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some people believe that advertisements are not useful ,
others
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and others
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support the idea that these programs can help
customers
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customers'
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lives to be more convenient. In
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essay, I am going to examine both points of view and
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I will tell my own opinion. Psychologically, it is true that advertising programs motivate buyers to purchase the items even
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if they
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do not want them . The point of prominent companies is to entice their shoppers in various ways and raise their
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.
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, sometimes you can see a product which
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has been
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produced recently everywhere
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as
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channels, shopping malls, Billboards
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apply
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etc,
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, you become motivated to buy it and use it because you
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mentally want to find an experience about that product, so in some ways, you are forced to buy it.
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, some citizens like advertising programs ,since they believe they can help us to develop our knowledge about different
products
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which are used for the same purposes or they produced recently and we do not have enough information about them.
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, it can raise the competition between companies to
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their quality as all the shoppers compare their
products
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with other materials.
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, when you want to buy soap, you have multiple choices, but you would buy a soap which is recently advertised and you have found more information about it by its advertising. In conclusion,
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I completely agree with
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idea that showing off
products
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can irritate viewers a lot, they can
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help them to choose what they need more easily and in
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way, they do not waste their time .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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