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Employeers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

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The recent advancements in technology have made job search hassle-free.
However
, while
searchingfor
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searching for
 a job some of the employers tend to ask for personal
data
such
 as hobbies and interests, and sometimes even marital status. some people believe
this
data
 may be relevant and useful while others simply reject
this
 notion.
This
 essay will discuss both these views and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with, there are different scenarios where gathering the personal information of
employees
 can prove to be helpful. One
such
 scenario can be a job in the IT industry. IT has a lot of different roles some of which might require a
person
 to work in shifts. If a
person
 is younger, mostly will be able to work in shifts since the energy levels are much higher as compared to a
person
 who is ageing.
For example
, if the
person
 is married
then
 it becomes nearly impossible to make him work in shifts
,
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 since it can ruin his time with his family which
resulting
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 in a poor work-life balance.
Hence
 getting some personal info before assigning a role to an employee can prove to be an advantage for
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. day-in-day-out.
On the other hand
, gathering personal information from
employees
 can
also
 result in demotivation of
employees
 because some of them might not be ready to share each and everything with the employer and might start giving false
data
. In
such
case
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, they may tend to get totally different roles based on the input they provided.
For example
, if a candidate is interested in working in an environment where there is not much communication required.
However
, he/she have mentioned the false interest while the employer was gathering personal info.
This
 can totally shift their career in the long term and
employees
 might get depressed in long run. To recapitulate, In my humble opinion, based on the arguments aforementioned above, I really think it is better that
employees
 gather personal
data
 beforehand so that
employees
 can get their designated role.
Also
, it makes it easy for employers to assign various roles.
Submitted by Mats Hummles on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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