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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

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The bar chart below illustrates the percentage of purchasing and consuming
coffee
 and tea habit in five cities of Australia (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
, and Hobart) within the
last
 four weeks. Overall, there are three ways of buying which are brought fresh
coffee
, brought
instant
coffee
 and brought
coffee
 or tea at a
cafe
. In most of the cities,
people
 prefer to grab a drink at a
cafe
 as the most favourable way except in
Adelaide
.
Moreover
, drinking
instant
coffee
 is more popular than drinking fresh for all of the cities. Melbourne is the city where
people
 went to a
cafe
 the most (around 64%). Hobart and Sydney have a slightly lower
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percentage of
people
 who went to cafes compared to Melbourne, around 63% and 61% respectively.
Next
, citizen in Bisbisban responds that only around 55% of them pick up the drink at a
cafe
.
In contrast
,
Adelaide
 is the only city in which
people
 prefer to consume
instant
coffee
 than go to the
cafe
 (under 50%).
Furthermore
, the chart shows that
people
 in Brisbane,
Adelaide
, and Hobart considerably have prefered to buy
instant
coffee
 than purchasing fresh
coffee
 as the chart shows a significantly different, around 24%, 16%, and 16% respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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