Some people say that public sports facilities improve people health problems. Others argue that this development has insignificant effects on public health. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Sports
help to maintain both the physical and mental well being of
people
. In many ,countries public
sports
facilities
have been well established to improve the quality of
people
's lives.
However
, while some
people
highly appreciate it, some
people
think in a totally different manner about it. Here l am going to discuss both these views in detail. The establishment of public health
facilities
directly helps to enhance health. Because
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people
can afford all these
facilities
without paying for them. Especially, it is an advantage for urban communities.
Moreover
, it allows
people
to spend their free time in a useful way. As well as involved in
sports
help them to get rid of their busy lifestyle. Despite that, the availability of public
sports
facilities
helps to allocate time for
sports
. For example, when someone is free at night he or she can do
sports
without any burden.
However
, some
people
think that public
sports
facilities
cause a detrimental impact on public health. Because all these
facilities
are easily accessible for anyone, thereby hygienic problems could occur. For ,example public places were not allowed for
people
during the corona pandemic. Other than that
people
say that those things are not established under the supervision of experts,
therefore
these equipment
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can cause harm to the
people
. As well as there are no coaches to supervise
people
, and they have to do
sports
with their own knowledge. Eventually, l would like to conclude that public
sports
facilities
provide great service to the community,
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all these things should be maintained well under the supervision of experts to make it more useful.
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