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Some people believe that reading stories from e-book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent Do you agree or disagree?

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In the era of
this
 modern world, everything is getting up to date whether it is study, business entertainment or daily jobs.
Tv
 and Pc play a vital role in our lives. children are preferring the use of technology as means of doing study or entertainment or staying connected to the world.some people think that E-books are a better source of gathering more information about various topics or getting known about more stories but others support
Tv
 and Notepads. I will discuss both sides and give my opinion at the
last
. On the one hand, some peeps consider e-books rather than television or computer. They think that kids gain more information about the facts when they read them rather than watching the stories. They can improve their vocabulary, grammar, writing techniques as well as spellings because everything is in a written form. E-books are portable can be kept anywhere and the most important thing is they are easy on the eyes . It does not give any harm to the eyesight.
On the other hand
, computers and
Tv
 are a major part of our daily life. They are the biggest source of entertainment. and gaming on computers helps infants to improve their mental capabilities and make their brains sharper. stories or films are presented on television with the help of audio and films which is more realistic than reading. Many of the educational programs are shown on the
Tv
 which helps kids to gather more facts about things. It becomes easier to learn something when we are watching it rather than reading it through a paper and it is more practical. In my opinion, both Automation and electronic books are fundamental keys for the growth of our younger ones. But the use of technology should be limited as if they have some advantages, they have some disadvantages as well. More use of these things can be bad for their physical growth of them.so they should be used in a slight way.
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