Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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students
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abroad for their education.I agree with the statement it is beneficial for their own
nation
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.
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, they get more
knowledge
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about foreign culture
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and learn how the good living they live and find
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the difference
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between them and in own and applied in there
life
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. They
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teach to our family and relatives so they can apply in there
life
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and
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live a good
life
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, which makes better
life
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in
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home
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the home
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country
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.Another thing is that
,
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they learn new things about technology and
study
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, I think which are not provided in theIR own
country
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. It is the
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main reason for
students
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who go abroad for their
study
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. After complete
study
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when they return in own
country
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,
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they can teach to other-regarding new technology and
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research on that and can give better attribute to our
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They
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also
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able to teach other rural
students
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, which they get
knowledge
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.
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, after complete
study
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, they get better job
opportunity
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in other nations.If
students
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get better pay than their
country
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then
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they
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settled there and give financial help to their guardians. By sending money from abroad to our
country
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also
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economical benefit for there
home
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country
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. Because it increases the demand
of
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own
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nation
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currency, which results increase
the
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price of
currency
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the currency
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.Another benefit for
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home
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the home
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nation
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is that more and more
students
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go in abroad increase the skilled labour in their
home
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nation
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. Because some time which skill they learn from
outer
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nation
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, cannot learn from
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home
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the home
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country
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due to important and linked
study
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material and tacher with that level of
knowledge
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are not available. In conclusion,
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study
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in abroad has more advantages for their
home
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country
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due to different levels of
knowledge
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, economical benefits for their
country
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and family and
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learning good skills and good living values.
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