Some people think that the government is wasting money on arts and that this money could be better spent elswhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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spent a budget on the arts and galleries. Some

people

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believe that

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money

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should be spent on other much

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important

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that

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on helping

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, creating jobs and doing the maintenance for the roads

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it on the

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of all, solving the

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than making exhibits. There are many

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struggling with finding their essential

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life-needs

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as food, houses and even water in some serious cases. The

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that some countries spent on

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, as a human, it is our

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, the

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to our poor brothers.

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of all, there are many unemployees nowadays, and

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several problems

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is a possible way to tackle

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problem.

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better for those

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of all, there are many roads

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which cause accidents and deaths sometimes.

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a difference and

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people

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, but there are

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important things that

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