In Some Countries Owning A Home Rather Than Renting One Is Considered More Important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

It is true that in some countries like China, South Korea or Japan, it is important to
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home rather than
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one. There are some reasons for
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, and in my
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it is a negative development.
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Asian countries. There are several reasons for
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phenomenon.
Firstly
, it is a traditional concept of Asian society. Only someone who
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a home
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can get married. And
this
concept influence generation by generation.
Secondly
,
people
will feel secure and
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when they are owing their own
house
. They do not need to be worried about one day they cannot
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there especially they paid a lot of money to decorate the
house
.
Finally
, it may
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incomplete health care system.
People
want to prepare some heritage
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to deal with unknown risks.
For example
, when they get old and without enough money, they will sell out the
house
to pay for the expensive hospital bills. In my view, it is a negative development. One problem is that the price of
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is too high to cover for most
people
.
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traditional concept, they work day and night to pay for it.
For example
, in China, a lot of
people
have a loan to pay in order to buy a
house
which may pay back 70 or 80 years. They
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not enough time to take a rest and have bad health physics.
By contrast
, European
people
are willing to rent
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and they do not need to pay high bills. They can change
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where they live if they want and lead a happy life. Another key factor is with the exploration of population, the limited land be used to build
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which
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damage to the environment. The forests were
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explored to build houses and replaced by concrete, and animals like birds have no place to live. It can cause
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damage. In conclusion, I think
this
development has bad effects.
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