Problem Solution Essay • Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. - What problems does this cause? - What are the possible solutions?

Elder employees have
less
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job
opportunities
in order to young
people
so that, they compete for
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the same
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same
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some
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positions, in these days. The major problem for
that is
less
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fewer
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jobs
opportunities
and high competition level that leads
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to problem
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problem
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problems
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for both sectors
therefore
, it can be solved by making
law
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the law
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of age limits and
impose
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imposing
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the infrastructure of business sectors.
Firstly
,
people
find very
less
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few
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vancanies
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vacancies
in every field. If any position
available
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is available
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that
also
fill
with in
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within
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hours because
jobs
are limited but colleges and universities are producing every year lots of graduates that arise unemployment.
For example
, in India, everyone looks for public
jobs
with high
salary
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salaries
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and benefits . Society,
therefore
,
try
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hard to grab
the
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apply
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jobs
but some of them get
jobs
others still wait for
next
year.
Moreover
,90% of the public lose their confidence due to failure and join other
jobs
wher
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where
when
they are overqualified even on less salaries.
Therefore
,
government
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the government
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should focus on foreign investors so,
people
can explore new
jobs
opportunities
which
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that
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would make their life better.
However
,
this
problem is handled by making
law
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laws
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such
as age limits so, freshers
also
join the party of
jobs
sectors. Sometimes, companies want
experience
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to experience
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over
hardwork
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hard work
and passion, but as a
newcomer
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,newcomer
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it is impossible to gain experience their youngsters fail to adopt
job
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jobs
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.
For instance
, my friend does not get
job
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a job
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in his dream field due to
lack
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a lack
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of experience even he has enough knowledge and all skills have which are required for that
job
position. In conclusion,
although
people
have
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not equal
opportunities
to get
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a job
the job
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job
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jobs
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due to various reasons,
government
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the government
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should enter
in
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apply
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the field of business so, they can enhance the business sector by implementing new
law
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laws
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so that everyone can gain benefits from it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Unfulfilling job
  • Mental health
  • Physical health
  • Financial stability
  • Job security
  • Societal norms
  • Career choices
  • Pursuing passion
  • Practicality
  • Personal growth
  • Skill development
  • Self-esteem
  • Social status
  • Work-life balance
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