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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people claim that teachers should be restricted to only
teach
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 academic subjects, while others disagree saying that they
also
 should teach
students
 to differentiate between right and wrong. From my perspective, age is an important factor in
this
.
Students
 in primary school are still learning how to socialize and behave around other people, so the teacher’s role should be to show them how to behave.
This
 becomes especially important for secondary
students
 and high schoolers as they become easily influenced by external factors.
As a result
, teachers are expected to look after and mend them should they get off
tracks
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track
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. From
university
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the university
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 level of education and on, most
of
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apply
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students
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the students
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 have enough maturity and has established a personality of their own so no
further
behavioral
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 instructions should be delivered. Rather, they should focus on delivering academic knowledge to aid the
students
 in their path. In conclusion, the teacher’s role is undeniably important and alters depending on the age of the
students
.
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