Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with trade, health and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

There are three
things
that every
people
deserve to have in their life which are healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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,
Education
and running trade. Some groups of
people
thinks
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think
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that
the
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apply
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rich
countries
should have
responsibilities
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responsibility
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to support
the
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apply
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poor
countries
. In
this
essay, I will illustrate some dark
side
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sides
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and brighter
side
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sides
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of
this
phenomenon with
respectfully
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circumstances. Poor
countries
can not affordable even for taking
education
and other medical facilities. There are
lots
of reasons behind
this
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these
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circumstances.
First
and for most,
Business
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have
not
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take
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taken
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any risk for investing
money
on
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in
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poor cities
side
. For that,
People
can not get all opportunities of three
basics
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things
of life.
For example
, It is
thruth
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truth
of the
world
that
well educated
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well-educated
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person open any business
in
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infamous
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famous
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the famous
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country, Where they will see their future plan.
Secondly
, many of the farmers are belongs to
poor
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the poor
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side
of
countries
.
In addition
, They
puts
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put
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lots
of focus on doing only farming
behalf
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on behalf
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of
the
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apply
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education
and other fields.
Last
but not least,
Money
is
very
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important
things
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thing
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to pursue every
dreams
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dream
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.
Additionally
, Poor
people
can not arrange
money
for
education
and
buisness
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business
in
this
high tech
world
. Rich
people
have
lots
of
money
for investing
to
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in
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poor
countries
and some of them are doing
this
. It is good
things
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thing
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to do and
benefits
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the benefits
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of that are following up. Poor
people
also
have some extraordinary skills but due to lack of
money
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,money
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they can not see their skills in front of the
world
. For that,
Rich
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a Rich
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person
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people
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take responsibility
of
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for
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them to show their talent in the
world
. So, it will beneficial for them as well as their
countries
.
For example
, We see
lots
of example in any
realities
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reality
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show that any capable person who arrange
money
for talented
people
to take part in
competition
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the competition
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. In conclusion, Any basic
things
of
World
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the World
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is
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are
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running on
people
either
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whether
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they are poor or rich. If
government
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the government
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will see their nation
on
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as
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developing
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a developing
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nation ,So they should neglect the difference
of
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between
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poor and rich and
given
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give
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equal opportunity for everyone.
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