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Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with trade, health and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

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There are three
things
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 that every
people
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 deserve to have in their life which are healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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,
Education
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 and running trade. Some groups of
people
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thinks
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think
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 that
the
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apply
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rich
countries
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 should have
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 to support
the
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apply
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poor
countries
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. In
this
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side
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sides
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 and brighter
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side
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 of
this
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 phenomenon with
respectfully
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 circumstances. Poor
countries
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 can not affordable even for taking
education
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 and other medical facilities. There are
lots
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 of reasons behind
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this
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these
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 circumstances.
First
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 and for most,
Business
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Businesses
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 have
not
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take
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taken
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 any risk for investing
money
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on
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in
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 poor cities
side
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. For that,
People
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 can not get all opportunities of three
basics
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things
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 of life.
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, It is
thruth
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truth
 of the
world
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 that
well educated
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well-educated
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 person open any business
in
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infamous
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famous
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the famous
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 country, Where they will see their future plan.
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, many of the farmers are belongs to
poor
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the poor
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side
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 of
countries
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.
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, They
puts
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lots
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 of focus on doing only farming
behalf
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on behalf
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 of
the
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apply
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education
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 and other fields.
Last
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 but not least,
Money
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 is
very
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a very
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 important
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things
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 to pursue every
dreams
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.
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, Poor
people
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 can not arrange
money
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 for
education
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 and
buisness
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business
 in
this
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 high tech
world
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. Rich
people
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 have
lots
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 of
money
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 for investing
to
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in
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 poor
countries
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 and some of them are doing
this
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. It is good
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things
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thing
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 to do and
benefits
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the benefits
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 of that are following up. Poor
people
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also
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 have some extraordinary skills but due to lack of
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money
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,money
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 they can not see their skills in front of the
world
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. For that,
Rich
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a Rich
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person
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people
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 take responsibility
of
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for
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 them to show their talent in the
world
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. So, it will beneficial for them as well as their
countries
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.
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, We see
lots
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 of example in any
realities
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reality
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 show that any capable person who arrange
money
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 for talented
people
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 to take part in
competition
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the competition
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. In conclusion, Any basic
things
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 of
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World
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the World
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is
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are
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 running on
people
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either
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whether
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 they are poor or rich. If
government
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the government
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 will see their nation
on
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as
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developing
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a developing
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 nation ,So they should neglect the difference
of
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between
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 poor and rich and
given
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give
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 equal opportunity for everyone.
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