Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

It is argued that being rich does not mean that
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life
always
be
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happy. I totally agree with
this
statement and
this
essay will discuss why wealth is not the only reason for
people
to achieve
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happiness
.
Moreover
, here we will show that there are several ways that could make
life
happier. Having so much money does not necessarily mean
happiness
. Sometimes it just makes
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life
more difficult because
people
tend to improve their social
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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. There are a lot of examples that rich
people
do not feel happy with their
life
even though
that
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they
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have whatever they want,
such
as a big house, luxury cars, and branded
stuffs
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stuff
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. One of them is public figures
such
as celebrities. In Korea,
for instance
, some of the public figures who have a lot of money and property end their
life
in their peak of
carrier
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. The main reason why they do
that is
because
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they find their
life
very difficult especially when so many haters
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them. These are the proofs that even if they have so much wealth in their
life
, there are not
feeling
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happy,
thus
eventually
end
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their
life
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tragically.
On the other hand
,
although
we do not have prosperity, we still can be happy in our
life
. Being grateful is one of the keys
of
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happiness
. We are blessed with whatever we have and fulfil our
life
with so many good things.
Furthermore
, having lovely friends and family who support our
life
are
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also
become the reason for us to keep happy. These have been proved by so many
people
in
this
world, including myself. I am very pleased with my
life
because I have a lovely family as well as friends surrounding me. In conclusion, even though having a lot of money
sometime
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gives positive, it does not always mean we can reach our
happiness
. Having
people
who
loves
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us
such
as our family and friend is the most important key to
be
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happy in our
life
.
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