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People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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life
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 nowadays is certainly different than in the past.Even though some
people
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 will prefer the past,I totally agree that
life
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 is much better now especially because of technological advancement and other modern developments .
This
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 essay will discuss more on my views.
To begin
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 with,To compare living in
this
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 modern
time
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 and in the past ,
indeed
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apply
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 modernization
have
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has
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 made humans live better.
firstly
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,machines developed with technology
has
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have
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 made
many
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much of
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 work easy these days.
people
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 don't have to suffer doing manual labour in order to survive.
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for
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 instance ,in the agricultural industry ,harvesting machines and tractors have eased the work for farmers and saved
time
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 unlike before
that
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when
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 farmers
spend
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spent
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 all their
time
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 on the farm to make the harvest.
Furthermore
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 ,the general quality of
life
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 has been improved in modern times.
folk
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Folks
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 have tons of machines at home that help them do
day to day
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 activities and save their
time
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.
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,
people
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 now have longer
life
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 spans
due to
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 advancements in the health sector.In the past ,there were so many diseases without a cure and the population frequently
die
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 from epidemic illnesses but with the improvement in health technology,sick folks can find solutions to their health issues .,
Moreover
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 procedures
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life
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like
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 organ transplants and having an artificial organ have saved many
people
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,
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,for ,instance individuals with cardiac conducting system problems can have their pacemaker replaced with an artificial one.The same applies to patients with orthopaedic concerns ,there are now available procedures like knee replacement,hip hip replacements and other complex procedures that help to restore physical ability in disabled
people
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.
To conclude
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,generally lives have improved tremendously in modern times as compared to the past.some
people
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 might have enjoyed living
the
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in the
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 past times but
certainly
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certainly,
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 technology and modern developments have changed lives.

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Introduction
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Task Achievement
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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