People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
life
nowadays is certainly different than in the past.Even though some people
will prefer the past,I totally agree that life
is much better now especially because of technological advancement and other modern developments .This
essay will discuss more on my views.
To begin
with,To compare living in this
modern time
and in the past ,indeed
modernization Rephrase
apply
have
made humans live better.Correct subject-verb agreement
has
firstly
,machines developed with technology has
made Correct subject-verb agreement
have
many
work easy these days.Fix the agreement mistake
much of
people
don't have to suffer doing manual labour in order to survive.for
instance ,in the agricultural industry ,harvesting machines and tractors have eased the work for farmers and saved Capitalize word
For
time
unlike before that
farmers Correct word choice
when
spend
all their Wrong verb form
spent
time
on the farm to make the harvest.Furthermore
,the general quality of life
has been improved in modern times.folk
have tons of machines at home that help them doFix the agreement mistake
Folks
day to day
activities and save their Add a hyphen
day-to-day
time
.
Additionally
,people
now have longer life
spans due to
advancements in the health sector.In the past ,there were so many diseases without a cure and the population frequently die
from epidemic illnesses but with the improvement in health technology,sick folks can find solutions to their health issues .,Wrong verb form
died
Moreover
procedures life
organ transplants and having an artificial organ have saved many Correct your spelling
like
people
, for instance
,for ,instance individuals with cardiac conducting system problems can have their pacemaker replaced with an artificial one.The same applies to patients with orthopaedic concerns ,there are now available procedures like knee replacement,hip hip replacements and other complex procedures that help to restore physical ability in disabled people
.
To conclude
,generally lives have improved tremendously in modern times as compared to the past.some people
might have enjoyed living the
past times but Change preposition
in the
certainly
technology and modern developments have changed lives.Add a comma
certainly,
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