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Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school leavers in most countries. How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?

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Uncertainly
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, in
this
 competitive era,
unemployement
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unemployment
 is
devastating
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a devastating
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 issue faced by most
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youngsters
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the youngsters
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.
However
, in developing countries, most of the literate
people
 are unemployed,
eventhough
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even though
 they have basic knowledge and skills for doing works. Except
this
 ,they
also
faces
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 many obstacles in their life which
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 will discuss in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, undoubtedly most of
youth
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the youth
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 in developing countries are educated but
still
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,still
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 they are not able to get a job to earn their bread because of competitive exams which are mandatory to get
a good jobs
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a good job
good jobs
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 in developing countries.
Moreover
, there are
less
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fewer
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 industries and companies so all seats are either filled by creamy students or the pupils who have money to buy a seat.
Thus
, all mediocre students remain unemployed because of
less
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fewer
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 opportunities they have.
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Furthermore
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Further more
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, corruption is
also
 one of the main
challenge
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challenges
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that is
 faced by today's generation. In every job, those pupils who have higher connections with the reputed
people
 are able to get good jobs
eventhough
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even though
 they do not have any knowledge about that particular job. In
addidtion
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addition
, the reservation quota all a big
challege
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challenge
 for talented
people
 because of it most of the
talent
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 students are not able
get
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to get
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 a good seat.
For instance
, in MBBS a person who has 60 % marks
able
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 to get a seat because
of
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he belongs to
lower
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a lower
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 class family but the other person who belongs to
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a middle
the middle
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middle class
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middle-class
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 family who
attain
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 85 % marks is not able
get
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to get
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 admission.
Hence
reservartion
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reservation
 and corruption are
also
the
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significant challenges
which
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that
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acts
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an
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as
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 obstacle
in
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to
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 today' youth success. To
recaptulate
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recapitulate
, after getting degrees most
of
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the
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literate
people
 faces many challenges. One of the significant
challenge
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challenges
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 is unemployment. Except that, corruption and reservation quota is
also
 faced by today,s generation.
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