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Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (eg cost, environment). Discuss both views and give opinion.

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A group of people think governments should allocate money on faster means of transportation, whereas some argue with the former
satement
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statement
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disussion
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discussion
 and opinion about
topic
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the topic
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given
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are given
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 of all ,
Economy
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the Economy
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 of a country mostly depends on its
transport
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system
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. Many countries in the world step ahead by
its
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their
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 modern
transport
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system
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 than others. Quicker transportation not only
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 time but
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 reduce the damage of products.
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 in our country due to lack of appropriate updated
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 systems goods get damaged which in turns responsible for the fall of economy of a country.
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,
faster
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a faster
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transport
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system
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also
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save
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 time.
on the other hand
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, Authorities
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 focus on some other issues
such
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 as
environment
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, cost and so on.
Environment
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 pollution is one of the burning
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now a days
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nowadays
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. If pollution going on, in near future it
wiil
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will
 be impossible for our
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 generation to lead
a healthy lives
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a healthy life
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. Many
health related
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health-related
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 problems
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 as depression,respiratory infection,skin disease will occur. In my point of view, Governments should
emphasis
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 both
on
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apply
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faster means of public
transport
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 and other fields like
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environment
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the environment
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need
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the need
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of
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for
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faster
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a faster
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transport
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system
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 is
neccessary
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necessary
, the
neccesity
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necessity
 of
safe
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a safe
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environment
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 is
also
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 undeniable.
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