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Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (eg cost, environment). Discuss both views and give opinion.

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A group of people think governments should allocate money on faster means of transportation, whereas some argue with the former
satement
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statement
.
Detail
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disussion
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discussion
 and opinion about
topic
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the topic
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given
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 below.
First
 of all ,
Economy
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the Economy
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 of a country mostly depends on its
transport
system
. Many countries in the world step ahead by
its
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their
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 modern
transport
system
 than others. Quicker transportation not only
save
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 time but
also
 reduce the damage of products.
For example
 in our country due to lack of appropriate updated
transport
 systems goods get damaged which in turns responsible for the fall of economy of a country.
Secondly
,
faster
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transport
system
also
save
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 time.
on the other hand
, Authorities
also
 focus on some other issues
such
 as
environment
, cost and so on.
Environment
 pollution is one of the burning
issue
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now a days
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nowadays
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. If pollution going on, in near future it
wiil
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will
 be impossible for our
next
 generation to lead
a healthy lives
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a healthy life
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. Many
health related
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health-related
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 problems
such
 as depression,respiratory infection,skin disease will occur. In my point of view, Governments should
emphasis
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emphasise
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 both
on
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apply
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faster means of public
transport
 and other fields like
environment
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the environment
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.
Although
need
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the need
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of
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for
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faster
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a faster
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transport
system
 is
neccessary
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necessary
, the
neccesity
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necessity
 of
safe
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a safe
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environment
 is
also
 undeniable.
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