Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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for people
who close to them. Although
there are arguments on both sides, due to my personal beliefs I agree with
that a ban is the most appropriate course of action. These beliefs will be discussed in support of my personal stance in the following paragraphs.
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people
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Thus
, individuals should have the freedom to smoke where they wish.
Why smoking should be banned in public places? The underlying reason behind this
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In conclusion, it is clear that it should be made illegal to smoke in public places. This
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