Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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contemporary era, many
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are very passionate about smoking and it is very common
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all around the world;
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, smoking is not only leads to harmful
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smokers, but
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for
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who close to them.
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there are arguments on both sides, due to my personal beliefs I agree
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that a ban is the most appropriate course of action. These beliefs will be discussed in support of my personal stance in the following paragraphs. To embark on, there is no doubt for some
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who are not supported to ban smoking because they believe that many passive smokers would like to recuperate their stressful life by going to pub and disco
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, so banning
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away these types of small baseness.
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it would be more intricate for those
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who are habituated with smoking. If they are not doing smoke
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specific time interval, they may get some adverse effects like
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, dizziness. To
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corroborate the above view, One of the USA citizens
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smoking and one day he visited
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Europe where smoking is totally prohibited and he was not able to survive there.
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, individuals should have the freedom to smoke where they wish. Why smoking should be banned in public places? The underlying reason behind
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is that a cigarette contains
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compound which is carcinogenic and it leads
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harm to
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health
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. Not only those who are doing
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but
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beside the smokers can develop cancers of lungs, throat, mouth and other sites in the body.
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, it is more important
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health
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rather than
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.
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, one recent study conducted by
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sector in 2020 revealed that 80%
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are suffering
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bronchitis disease due to toxic air
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, as it was rare
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a decade ago. The more precautions, the better the
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is. In conclusion, it is clear that it should be made illegal to smoke in public places.
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of thousands of
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and
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definitely a positive development.
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