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Research shows that business meetings, discussions, and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 day scenario suggests that most of the formal interactions, debates and employee training are taking place online.While there are some ignorable drawbacks associated with
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 newly developed business practice,the advantages do outweigh the disadvantages.
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advantages
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 holding online meet-ups.With the rise in connecting through virtual platforms,
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 living had been made easier,with both the parents frequently available at home to take care of their children.Evidently,work-life balance has been tremendously increased as the need for staying back at
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 for late hours
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 is grounded down
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 actually has created sufficient family time for the employees.
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,employers witnessed the benefits of increased productivity.
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 of online meeting
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 has helped workers to stay away from life-threatening COVID-19 scare and protected them from being complacent for the deadly virus. While on the other side,employers are posed a risky situation of the organisation specific, confidential information being hacked away.With the increase in
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great demand for meetings from home,there
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information theft is heard quite often in the current day scenario.
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,recently in Australia,the nation-fame bank,Westpac’s clients are warned of their personal data stolen news.So, organisations are
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 own safety protocols for the business itself and its clients. To conclude,though
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 tested,through strategic planning of safety measures,the employee could potentially enjoy the benefits of work-life balance.
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the employer
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employer
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parties from an unprecedented pandemic scare.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual collaboration
  • teleconferencing
  • webinar
  • remote access
  • cost efficiency
  • cultural diversity
  • interactive platform
  • networking opportunity
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • cybersecurity
  • encryption
  • bandwidth
  • digital divide
  • screen fatigue
  • team cohesion
  • asynchronous communication
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