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Some people say that it is necessary to use animals for testing the medicines intended for human beings, others however think it is cruel and unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #animals #medicines #beings
Scientists when they manufacture a new
medicine
 they will test the
medicine
 on
animals
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but
 some
people
 believe it is a
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very
 ruthless act. From the early days,
people
 are suffering from many diseases in order to make
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society
to
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lead
the
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 healthy life researchers will manufacture
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medicines.
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Before
 launching the product in the market they will
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tested
 it many ways. Mostly they will test it on the
animals
 because
animals
 are living beings as
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humans
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. They will give
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similar reactions
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medicine
 as we get from
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human beings.These are the reasons,
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animals
 are used for testing. Now coming to the other view of
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point
,few
people
 think it is very cruel to test on
animals
.Because they too have to suffer from the pain.
instead
 of using
this
 method they can opt
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 source for testing.But if we
dont
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don't
 take
this
 technique
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 consideration
then
 we may have to go through
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many problems.Without
testing
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 if we take the
medicine
 directly
then
,
people
 have to experience the other problems
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 from the drugs negative reaction.Researchers main aim is to save
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human life and to serve
the
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society. To
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,
medicine
were
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 tested on
animals
 to give
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society good healthy and a
save
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 life.
on the other
hand
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 some
people
 say it is very heartless.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Controversial
  • Ethical considerations
  • Inhumane
  • Medical advancements
  • Alternative methods
  • Regulations
  • Animal welfare
  • Scientific gains
  • Technological advancements
  • Animal rights
  • Experimentation
  • Insights
  • Therapies
  • Enforce
  • Respect
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