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In many workplaces, online communication is now more common than face-to-face meeting. Do you advantage of of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, online
communication
 has been pervasive, especially during the pandemic rather than face-to-face meetings. I wholeheartedly believe the cons are more than cons.
To begin
 with, as online
communication
 is more convenient, and accessible, it is more common these days.
This
 phenomenon provides us with the opportunity to communicate worldwide, and have a meeting with our colleagues overseas. It cuts the money and the time of transportation, especially in the rush hour. If anyone misses the meeting, she or he could watch it later and repeat the conversation without limitation.
For instance
, in the recent pandemic, as most people had to stay in their homes,
this
 online
communication
 helped them to continue their work without disruption.
However
, there are certain demerits with online
communication
. For
this
 kind of
communication
, you require stable electricity
,
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 and a data connection. Any disruption or poor connection could lead to disconnecting
,
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 and waste other members' time.
Also
, your precious data could be stolen through the Internet by hackers. It is essential to have a backup and fantastic restriction. With considering both sides of view,
although
 online
communication
 could be challenging for some especially for the old generation, I guess it is indispensable in our contemporary society. Through
this
 kind of
communication
, we can save time
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 and less expenditure.
Hence
, we have the opportunity to more investment in other important areas.
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