Many people believe that modern inventions have brought more problems than the benefit. Do you agree or disagree?

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todays
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of inventions
done
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, mostly in
technology
. So it is
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matter of debate do these new searches
also
stand new problems for us . I think
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developing
new
technology
is good for us, so I completely disagree with the statement.
Firstly
, new
technology
is
power
saving .
Energy
is
also
a big issue for us
,
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because without
energy
it is difficult to think
our
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life
.
Energy
or
power
is
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everywhere
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every where
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in
shape
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of
electercity
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electricity
and
fules
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fuels
files
like petrol, diesel and gas . These types of
energy
source
is
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only
limted
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limited
available . So it is
necassery
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necessary
to save . It is impossible without inventing new inventions, without decreasing our demand . Example LED bulbs are
big
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invention by engineers, which decrease
the
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lot of
power
consumption without
limting
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limiting
our demands and give better light
then
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old bulbs.
Secondly
, new
ssearches
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searches
researchers
make our
life
more easy
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easier
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,
confertable
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comfortable
and safe .
Machines
are
very
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good example which makes our
life
better . With
machines
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we are more capable to do difficult work and
also
save
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our
time
,
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because
machines
are fast . They make our
life
easy and
confertable
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comfortable
because
of
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we have to only operate them or in modern
time
there are
also
some automatic
machines
in we have to only give commands and they complete work on there own .
Devolping
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Developing
new
technology
in
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medical
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ismedical
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also
safe our
life
. There are now
lot
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of
medicens
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medicines
are invented, which save human beings from dangerous
diseas
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disease
diseases
. Like in
this
penadamic
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pandemic
time
invention of covid vaccine safe many
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lives
life
lifes
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by protecting our body from coronavirus. In conclusion,
devolping
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developing
our science and
technology
is not bad for us, because it is
power saving
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power-saving
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and make our
life
better and safe .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern inventions
  • problems
  • benefits
  • environmental issues
  • social problems
  • quality of life
  • scientific advancements
  • medical advances
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