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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, in most areas of the world, teenagers aren’t really up to date with
news
, as they began to avoid buying
newspapers
 and watching
news
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 on TV. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons for
this
 growing problem and explore possible solutions.
Firstly
, I will discuss
about
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the difficult language most
newspapers
use
 and
secondly
 I will consider how the
use
 of social networks may
also
 be a reason for young people not
following
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news
.
To begin
 with, it is clear that
newspapers
 often
use
 a difficult vocabulary.
Consequently
,
this
 could prevent teens from fully understanding the meaning of the article they’re reading
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, and may
also
 result in young people considering worldwide
news
 as boring. One solution to
this
 growing problem could be the creation of more magazines, which could describe and explain these topics to young
adults
 in a more interesting way. In
this
 way, teenagers would be really encouraged to read articles as they would really understand what’s written, and they wouldn’t regard
this
 activity as a waste of time. Another reason why teenagers don’t follow worldwide developments may
also
 be that they spend too much time on social networks. These days, the
use
 of social
network
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 and instant chatting services has really become the major form of entertainment for young
adults
. To avoid
this
, teens should be made aware of the existence of many online platforms, which include lots of videos and explanations about the current political and economic situation. Since the majority of
this website
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 are made for young
adults
, by using them, they could really solve the problem of the boringness of conventional journals. In conclusion,
newspapers
 don’t really fit young people’s needs in terms of being simple and interesting. In my opinion,
adults
 should teach them the importance of being up to date, even by using non-conventional ways of conveying
news
.
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