In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In most of
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countries are facing higher increment in cost of
health
facilities. It is mainly due to the unhealthy older
population
within the
country
. As it is enunciated by the proportion of the society,
older
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generation should responsible for their own expenses for
health
in future. I
am disagree
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with
this
apprehension. I provide an interesting characterization and exemplify the essential elements to justify my claim. In my perspective,
ageing
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generation is unhealthy due to their age and diseases.
Hence
as a
country
fund for their needs is essential.
Otherwise
, most of the elders will
inadeque
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inadequate
to obtain necessary
health
support. As an instance, research done by
the
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Harvard University proved that
population
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over the age
sixty
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of sixty
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years are inability to do jobs
for
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find financial support.
Therefore
, obtaining money from elders for their wellbeing is not a good option to control
cost
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costs
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in healthcare.
Moreover
, many retired citizens
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their jobs for the sake of the
country
in their
survice
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service
time. In
such
situation
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, it is a governmental responsibility to protect them as senior citizens in the
country
.
Additionally
, every individual's within the
country
is equally important to build up the
country
economy.
Hence
free healthcare
sysytem
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system
for senior
citizen
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citizens
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is a necessary requirement of the
country
. As an illustration,
American
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government announced that all
elder
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the elder
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population
in
country
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the country
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are free from all medicine cost. In a conclusion, no one can neglect the
aging
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population
from the free facilities in
health
. Because they
also
have right to get those facilities, as they have
huge
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impact to build the
country
economy status in their younger ages.
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