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Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
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 day and age, the detrimental impacts of materials used for packaging lead to a debatable topic that whether manufactures and salesman are supposed to reduce the colossal packing in their
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 or the consumers should avoid purchasing
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 in a hope of protecting the environment. I believe that both factories and buyers have the same role in
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 case.
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 with, it is believed that international manufacturers and factories with massive productions are responsible for a large proportion of environmental damages which have happened in the past few decades. Those factories overuse a variety of materials
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 as plastic and colourful papers to label their
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 in order to promote their brand and attract more consumers.
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, in the toy industry, a simple Lego is wrapped by many plastics and every piece of it is put in a separate plastic bag which would be easily reduced.
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, it would be fair to say, these massive producers are the ones who are burdened with huge responsibilities to replace their packing approach to reduce the excessive consumption of goods in use. On the other side, the public as shoppers possesses the freedom to choose their needs among many options provided in malls and supermarkets. Every individual is responsible for the potential factors that are leading to an environmental crisis. So, at the time of shopping, consumers should choose the
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 without extra packing. Not only
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 simple action may reduce excessive use of plastic and paper but
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 in a long run, would contribute to a gradual decrease in the sale rate of
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 manufactures with overpacking.
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 can be regarded as an indirect message to owners of those companies to take essential steps to eliminate extra packing.
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, the purchaser plays an indispensable role in
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 term. To sum up, while it is believed that manufactures are burdened with the huge responsibility of eliminating extra use of boxing materials, others are of the opinion that it is consumers’ responsibility to avoid buying
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. In my opinion, both owners of businesses and individuals as buyers have a crucial role to play.
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