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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

#people #schools #students #abilities
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In recent days, it is evident that
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 of learning
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, some people think that
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 consideration due to
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 it is. My view on
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 subject in
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entire
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 in a new era
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represented
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 by multinational corporations , international organizations and hyper-connected society. For these reasons, most educational institutions
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importance
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 of
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a skeptical
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 from some
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critics
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the critics
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, It is a common belief that Multilingual users have many advantages in
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 market.It has proved to be the
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 of multilingual speakers in most corporations. To be specific, In the age of globalization, the use of multiple languages has a competitive edge in the job market.
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 education has a positive effect not only get a job but
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 build a strong character.Take the example of the most individual’s cases are agree with strength of practicable speak various languages. They argue that premature foreign
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 education can interfere with the acquisition of the native
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reaserches
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researchers
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 have shown that even
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intervention
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 during the time of
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bring
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 huge confusion to children. ​
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In conclusion
,
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the first
 step to understanding various cultures. For these reasons, I believe that
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foreign language
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education for children in the age of multiculturalism and globalization will become competitive in the future
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