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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Mankind has brought itself to a bleeding-edge technology in every sector and
one
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 of them is the transition from paper-based
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 to
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books
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. The latter is on a steady rise and responsible for many publication houses
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switching to
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books
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 from paper-based
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. Accounting for handling, convenience, safety and remaining other benefits. The merits of
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books
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 surpass the demerits.
Due to
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 technological advancement, most individuals including all age groups have their own mobile phones or other smart gadgets. In these ,devices they can easily store the
books
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 in soft copy format as it’s convenient for handling as compared to their counterpart.
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one
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 can seamlessly read
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books
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 as per requirement likely in travelling or in other situations.
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,
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books
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 have uncountable life as long as the reader doesn’t delete them from the device
whereas
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 paper-based
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 are affected as the pages cross their self-life.
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, nowadays most of the students in India are using
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books
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 than they used to. Recently
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 research in the USA, reveals that because of these salient
features
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features,
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e-book
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e-books
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 gained more demand as compared to paper-based
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. Sharing
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books
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 is at the finger of the tip as it doesn’t require effort like in the case of paper-based
books
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one
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 must reach to
book depot
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. Within a fraction of
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a seconds
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seconds
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,
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books
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 are shared with the required person. For
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 scenario, distances make no sense. Nowadays some
software’s
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 allows
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changes in
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e-book
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e-books
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 likely as the reader has the habit of paper-based
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.
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, customers of the
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 have been soaring day by day.
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last
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 month,
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 case study concluded that
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 users are increasing and
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 number will go up in the upcoming era. To recapitulate,
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 detriments and examples,
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books
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 have more positive points. Masses from each age group now have access to
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books
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 as
it
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provides
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 comfortability for reading and
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 no need for strength for carrying out.
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Include more specific examples to strengthen your argument and provide clear evidence.
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Ensure all ideas are fully expanded and explained with supporting details.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
task achievement
The response addresses the prompt and provides some well-thought-out points regarding the benefits of e-books.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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