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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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As it is enunciated by the proportion of the society, science practises with
animals
 should be prohibited while others in contradictory view that
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those
 practices help to produce human safe health products.
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, there is a dichotomy view of
this
 controversial argument, I am of the opinion that animal
experiments
 had done numerous advantages for
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 field while
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 necessary to have
such
 kinds of tests before
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 those drugs or medicine to society. I provide an interesting characterization and exemplify the essential elements to justify my claim. As the view of
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 fraction, the majority of the new implementation in drugs and medicines are checked
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 the help of animal
experiments
. It is
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factor
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 to check the produced
products's
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 quality and safe before human use.
Additionally
,
this
 type of
experiments
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 had done remarkable inventions in the past medical field. As an instance, the
anthesia
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anaesthesia
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commnly
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 pain killer
drug
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in
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the
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all over the world while it
also
 undergoes several
reserchers
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researchers
 by
animals
 to prove the real nature of it.
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 evident fact that
this
 type of researches essential to look forward
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medicinal
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 path.
In contrast
 , as others believe, animal
experiments
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banded
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 due to the laws of humanity. According to them all lives on earth have
right
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 to live free as they want.
Hence
 using them for beneficial impacts
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 humans are
wrongdoing
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 thing.
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Furthermore
 most of the
animals
 are facing
to
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extinction
in
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 the earth.
Therefore
 humans should always respect and protect the
animals
 as they are equally important to the existence of the earth. In
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conclution
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conclusion
, animal
experiments
 are essential to
better
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 medicinal future while it should have control under certain circumstances.
Otherwise
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 most of the endemic species will extinct from the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethics
  • Morality
  • Vivisection
  • In vivo testing
  • Cruelty-free
  • Animal welfare
  • Biomedical research
  • Toxicology
  • Sentience
  • Compassionate
  • Humane
  • Speciesism
  • In vitro
  • Alternative methods
  • Pharmacology
  • Clinical trials
  • Bioethics
  • Animal rights
  • Pain threshold
  • Efficacy
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