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Some people believe that the salaries paid to professional sportspeople are too high ,while others argue that sports salaries are fair. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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While many believe that the income of sports personalities
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 tremendously high,others,including me,think that
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 paid
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what they deserve.
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views and explains the reason
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why I consider
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sports
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 are paid fair. On one hand,many think that recreational professionals are given
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sum
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 of money as their salary.For them,individuals working in other industrial sectors need to wear them out to attain
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the level, when they can be well paid off,these
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 are offered
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incentives with each international game or tournament they represent.
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,a few cricket
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 in India earn more than a chief scientist who works strenuously all day and night.Arguably,they want the largely paid money to be fairly given to the people involved in physical works rather than getting accumulated in one particular field and having the people involved in it to be advantaged.
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, others, including me, believe that
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 who are representing a nation on the world stage are offered with
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 income.To agree with, sportsmen cannot be in the spotlight over the night.They actually have to dedicate the
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 of normal
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 to achieve their desire.
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, in an interview by a famous badminton player,P.V.Sindhu, after winning
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a silver
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 medal in Olympics,that her
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 of consistent mobile-free, isolated and constant practice made her dream come true. So,it is
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 wrong to pay them what they are receiving now
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since they are
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proud of the country. To conclude,despite the fact that few of our citizens relentlessly believe that people involved in physical activities are largely paid and that should be better given to workers in other jobs,like many others,I think the amount dispensed to a sportsperson is only what he/she worked for as
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 person is nation’s pride.
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