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Some people hold that the development of modern science and technology leads to environmental pollution and energy shortage. What do you think?

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The advancement of
technology
 and
science
 has brought a huge development to human civilization.
However
, Some
people
 think it leads the environmental pollution more dramatically.
This
 essay is my personal opinion on
this
 point of view. During the process of formation and development of world history. Inventions have been created by scientists or inventors. Particular in transportation, when the steam engine was invented. We have many
thing
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things
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 like cars, trains and even planes for the far distance we have to go. Entertainment has a leap when tv comes. Scientist creates more vaccine or medicine are helping
people
 cure their illness like cancer, Alzheimer. Undeniable, the benefits we have from
science
 and
technology
 bring to our humankind. We can go to any place in the world and when the night comes we have lights shine for us. The convenience of the internet is helping on contact, work, study many different things in our daily life. In recent years, The
environment
 has been polluted from the emissions of vehicles.
People
 are finding ways out through many
solution
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 from
science
 and
technology
. Power electricity can get from the energy of wind , sun , ... Scientists are researching to decrease the amount of garbage and emission to the
environment
 .
People
aware
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 of the importance to protect
environment
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the environment
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. In the future not far, we will bring back our blue planet. Do not blame for the development of
science
 and
technology
. Turn back and see what you have done to protect our planet. Eventually, after
give
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 my opinion. I think
people
 should be aware of
protection
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the protection
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environment
. Do not blame
for
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apply
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anything
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any thing
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anything
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 and see what you can do for the place you are living or the planet you are staying
.
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on.
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