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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree (or) dis-agree.

#people #road #safety #age #car #motorbike #dis-agree
Few people believe that
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nikeeping
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keeping
 the particular age
number
 is necessary to ride
vehicles
 in order to decrease
road
accident
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. I completely agree with the statement regarding
road
safety
. Today, we are living in
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 world where
road
 accidents became more common and
road
safety
 is a major problem. If the government will take strict action on minors by realising the legislation on the minimum age for driving any vehicle. If these
rules
 will come into work
then
 there will be many possibilities of reducing the accident (or) deaths. Because when these
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 will follow
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number
 of
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 and
car
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 will get decrease on roads.
Then
 automatically the ratio of incidents happening will
also
 decrease. These are the measures we can follow to maintain
safety
 while riding.
In addition
 to
this
, if
vehicles
 come on roads according to their
number
 plates.
For example
, even land and. Of
number
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vehicles
 should come on the
road
 on these particular by following the even and odd sequence. Apart from
this
, the government plays a major role in implementing
safety
rules
. By appointing more traffic officers for one who won't follow the
rules
 property should take them
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 consideration
moreover
 technology has developed very fastly that bg fixing the sensors on roads they can catch the person who has violated the
rules
. To conclude,
road
safety
 is necessary for every individual in the world. By keeping and by following the
rules
 and not allowing the minors to ride the
vehicles
. By following these precautions we can overcome
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