Governemnts should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Nowadays, there
are
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some
argument
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that is
between
train
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and automotive industries which one is
suitable
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investment for countries. In my opinion,
cars
or some technological vehicles have more
advantage
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than trains.
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essay would explain some transport
methods
which have better gain than railways. In a few decades, technology has
raisen
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risen
raised
arisen
for trains that include Maglev Train
System
which you can travel in the air and
this
system
is very fast. But Maglev Train
system
is not just increased
system
in transport
methods
so you can find a lot of
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gorgeous
projects for
cars
, busses, planes and alternative transfer systems.
In
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instance,
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Transfer Method is the fastest transfer way which people can travel in
vacuum
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tube
that
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invented by Elon Musk.
This
system
has uploaded day by day and it will be futuristic technology
furthermore
, it will be cheaper than now so governments can spend money like
this
futurecome
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future come
projects. Maglev Trains is not just one example, I can give a lot of
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as
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cars
. Recently all car
camponies
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companies
work on
self driving
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car
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cars
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process and you can see on ways as Tesla that
also
invented by Elon Musk. About
this
system
society can sit on their car seat in safety and
this
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automated
cars
will solve traffic problems. In conclusion, Railway is
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alternative for
traveling
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place
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but it is not the best solution in the future. If we
are want
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more safety and faster path, we should choose more scientific
methods
and give money for improving
this
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methods
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • carbon footprint
  • commuter congestion
  • interconnectivity
  • public infrastructure
  • operational costs
  • mass transit
  • urban development
  • energy efficiency
  • socio-economic disparities
  • heritage railways
  • tourist attractions
  • environmental conservation
  • urban sprawl
  • renewable energy
  • high-speed rail
  • infrastructure investment
  • traffic management
  • public-private partnership
  • cross-country connectivity
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