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Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays most green
energy
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evermore
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 prevalent in
both
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 developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious
threat
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 to
energy
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security
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. Discuss
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 views and give your opinion. The world today uses more renewable
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 than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is economically sound;
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, some argue that green
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 could undermine the reliability of the global supply
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 of its dependency on climatic and meteorological phenomena.
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 views, but personally, I strongly advocate the adoption of renewable sources of
energy
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. On the one hand, opponents of renewables claim that the world could face disruptions to the power supply should they be fully adopted.
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 is largely due to the fact that many green
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technologies
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 currently in use depend on changeable and unpredictable phenomena
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 as wind, rain and cloud cover. To take the fastest growing sector as an example, solar panels can only be used in the presence of strong and direct sunlight, and
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 the problem of directness has already been somewhat solved with moving panel arrays, a cloudy few days could still result in a blackout if we depended entirely on solar power; something
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 unlikely to occur today given current oil stockpiles.
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, fossil fuels are a larger
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 to
energy
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security
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 since they are certainly finite in quantity, whereas renewable
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 is effectively infinite; once the Earth’s oil is depleted, there will be no
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security
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 without green
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technologies
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.
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, problems of unpredictability can be mitigated by improving battery
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 (to create a larger buffer), building more renewable
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 generators (to increase supply during ideal conditions) and improving current
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 (to increase efficiency),
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 as in the moving solar panel example. Proponents of renewables
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 claim that they are the most economically sound option. To conclude, while many may believe that green
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technologies
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 are a
threat
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 to
energy
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security
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, the fossil fuels they frequently promote are a greater
threat
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, and renewables are in fact the only sound option,
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 economically and environmentally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Hydro energy
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Global warming
  • Climate change
  • Technology advancements
  • Economies of scale
  • Intermittent
  • Variable
  • Capital investment
  • Energy infrastructure
  • Energy storage technology
  • Energy supply
  • Energy security
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