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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers.

#minutes #job #course #teachers
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that
i
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 cannot continue
my
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 course that
i
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 have enrolled on your
class
.With my current schedule it
almost
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 impossible for me to attend
in
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your morning
class
.I hope you will consider my situation
favorably
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. Let me explain my situation,I am currently employed in a
full time
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 job,my work start
8
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at 8
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am in the morning till 5pm in the afternoon.My schedule started to have a conflict when the company was
lack
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 of labour manpower,I need to extend my work hours.With my current
schedule
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 it will be hard for me to attend your
class
. Would you kindly cancel my enrollment
on
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 your
class
 for
i
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 cannot continue the course
.
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 Thank you for your consideration. Faithfully yours. Evan
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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