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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregun language is in order to travel ro ot work in foregin country. Others say that these are not the only reason why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from yours knowledge or experience.

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Some people believe that
one
 should learn a foreign
language
,
such
 as French and German only to travel to other nations whereas other people believe that knowing any
language
 other than their own national
language
 can be valuable. Knowing many languages opens the door for international opportunities and gives benefits to brain development as it is proven by science. Learning French or German will not help anyone who lives and works in Mumbai because in
this
 city most of the people speak Hindi and the local
language
that is
 Marathi.
Also
, hard
language
such
 as Japanese can be time taking and it is of no use. Knowing many languages can help an individual on any level. scientific surveys had proved that a person knowing more than
one
language
 is better at making choices. Asian languages
such
 as the Chinese use low and high pitch tones for specific words.
This
 way of talking benefits them to understand music nodes better while learning guitar or piano. at the airport in
france
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, when
i
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I
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 ask
taxi
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the taxi
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 driver to take me to the
eiffel
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 tower he could not understand what
i
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I
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 was referring to because in french the
eiffel
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 tower
pronounce
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 differently.
such
incident
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 of communication barrier accrued throughout my trip.
india
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India
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 is
place
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a place
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 where you will find most of the population know more than
one
language
,
that
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 helps them to coordinate better with
person
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the person
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 they are working with. many of the
indians
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Indians
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 are familiar with
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English
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english
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the english
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language
 that
open
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 the door for international growth for them. It is important to know other communities
language
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 which
benefit
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benefits
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 in many ways. Knowing more than
one
language
 is always better in terms of personal growth.
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