The continued ride in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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number of the world

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than plastic pollution and increasing temperatures. Countries

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as India and China have already put strict laws to control their citizen count as these are the

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nations. Increasing numbers of citizens can affect the resources of the country. Issues

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as hunger are the main problems facing Africa. The USA and many developed nations help poor lands by providing help but

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reason for the increasing

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is ignorance of the government and people not knowing about family management and its benefits. In India, Today in many villages, people are still unaware that the problems can occur with more children they have

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numbers can cause great problems to the world we live in.

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more than we should. Factories

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produce supplies for the

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on the other hand

are the primary source of harmful gasses. These manufacturing industries are working on 100% capacity yet they are not enough to provide enough goods to the people. It is predicted that by 2050 the world's

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scientists are looking for ways to control medical crises that can not handle the current numbers of doctors we have as per regulations. humanity have reached

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and mars, but

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problem we face is still

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which is overpopulation is the main factor.

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