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Modern technology is being used more and more in different aspects of our lives, such as education. Do the advantages of using technology as an educational tool outweigh its disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the era of
internet
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 and the evolution of hardware and software
technology
, yielding
technology
 to serve
education
 has become a reliable option to count on.
Although
 many people would think that deploying
latest
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technology
 would improve teaching techniques,
in
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 contrary, some other people would be reluctant to use
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computer and
technical
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 solutions to replace traditional
education
 techniques, In my opinion, the pros of using modern
technology
 in
education
 would defeat the cons of not applying it. As the latest technologies are invading every field and industry,
education
 would get more evolved by using the new technologies. Using
latest
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technology
 in
education
 can dramatically save the pupil and learner
time
,
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 since the student can attend the lectures and classes from home, or even better,
student
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the student
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 can watch the lectures using his mobile phone while doing another activity like having breakfast or while he is the public transportation.
Additionally
, deploying modern technological solutions in
education
 can save money as well like the innovative solution of distance learning,
for instance
, imagine that you can achieve your college degree without the necessity to travel
everyday
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 back and forth to and from the college or school.
However
, using
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modern
technology
 would improve our daily life, but we shouldn’t forget that everything In life comes with a tax, impeding
the
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technology
 in the
education
 life cycle can introduce some negative impacts. These days people already spend enough
time
 in front of the computer and mobile screen, by facilitating
education
 through laptops and mobile
phone
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phones
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,
time
 spent facing screens will be extended which
consequently
 will have a negative impact on our health. Another factor to remember and not to neglect, as the
time
 we spend in front of devices increases, self-isolation is increased too,
hence
 less
time
 for socializing and to spend with family and our beloved ones. In my opinion, the advantages of adopting new and modern
technology
 in the
education
 system would definitely
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 the disadvantage of not using it, as long as the society is keeping an open eye to avoid the drawbacks associated with it.
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