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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

#nations #wealth #food #education #responsibility #governments #citizens
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 no successful
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 that had no poverty
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 since it is a global problem and people struggle to lower the percentage. It is not who responsible for
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 the collaboration between the richest and
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 to tackle
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 regarding these topics. Some of the factors that could increase the poverties are less work market and a high price of living. Since there are not
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 businesses, there will
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 job opportunities. So it is a crucial part for
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business man
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 to increase their employees and expand their businesses.
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government
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 have an important role
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 regulating, managing either local
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 multinational company to hire the local people as much as possible. Not just
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 market,
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 had to control food prices and collaborate with wealthy citizens for a charity. Regarding the topics, both instances are important to reduce poverty.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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