More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

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Technology has become an important part of our life.

Thus

, it has made life easier and let us able to buy or do many things with one click only.

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, it caused many new health problems for humans.

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that, drugs nowadays are unable to heal the patients and in my point of

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they have to go back to the old type of treatments

such

as therapy treatment. Lifestyle changing growing up, in these days,

people

can go shopping by their mobile phone without any need to go by transportation to any mall, or they can transfer many by application on the phone

instead

of going to the bank. While

this

modern lifestyle has many advantages in our life, it made the human can’t walk for a long distance because of joint problems, and struggle pain in back or legs or have redeyes caused by using smart devices for most of the time in the days and becoming overweight. Whereas the treatment ways developed by the time, had become more accurate, and the number of hospitals is increasing, but still unable to treat some of the diseases, it is not always the solution to do a surgery, sometimes all

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you need is to go to a gym or do physical activities in your home,

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is the way how the old

people

treat

them self

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before

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of decades, and as we can see they are less stressful and live for roughly 8 years longer than

people

these days. My aunt went to a doctor because her arm hurts her, and he decide to do surgery on her arm,

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she stilled suffering from her arm, after that she went to a therapist and she has physical therapy, she is becoming better nowadays. Modern lifestyle increased the percentage of

people

who suffer from stress

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19%. It is very important to save how our grandfather and grandmother treat themself and use these ways to help us improve our health.

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary lifestyle
chronic conditions
holistic approach
preventive care
natural remedies
cultural heritage
ancestral knowledge
integration
complementary healthcare
regulation
standardization
scientific validation

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More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many people lose their income due to CoVid19 pandemic. What solution that can do by government or individual to overcome this problem.

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?