In some culture, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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Children
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's education has always been a hot topic of debate. In some cultures,
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are often told that anything they want will come true on the condition that they try hard enough.
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receives a lot of conflicting opinions. In
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essay, I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of telling the
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message
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. On the one hand, advocates who support the
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view may cite the encouragement that makes
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work hard as the main point. Specifically, by telling them
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, we can motivate them to study harder and achieve their goals in glory because if they really want something, they will work day and night to get it. Apart from motivating them,
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can form hard-working habits - which is undoubtedly necessary when they graduated from universities and sought for occupations. A lot of billionaires have sent
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to their son,
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, Jack Ma’s son, who is only 10 years old and after receiving
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from his dad that he will be qualified to inherit Alibaba in the future if he tried hard, he works day and night with a desire to come into his father’s fortune.
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still illustrates some drawbacks. The biggest of all is it will form the thought to
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that “they can achieve everything just by working hard”, even some wildest dreams like becoming a world’s dominator or conquering another universe.
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, some
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will have impractical thoughts,
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, and achieve nothing. Seriously, it can turn a child into a more negative version, and
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, committing a crime can happen.
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, if a child wants to be a world dominator, he
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she will try to be a boss among his
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her friends and bullying is likely to happen frequently as he
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she wants to show off their power by using his
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her fist. In conclusion,
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the aforementioned
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can benefit the
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by encouraging them to try hard to achieve their destinations, if it has not been explained clearly, it can reverse the benefits into the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persistence
  • resilience
  • self-esteem
  • confidence
  • motivation
  • disappointment
  • frustration
  • unrealistic expectations
  • talent
  • opportunity
  • socio-economic conditions
  • success
  • failure
  • learning process
  • valuable lessons
  • pressure
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • fear of failure
  • mental health
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