IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The product you ordered through online shopping has been delivered but has some problems. You are writing a letter to the seller to complain. In your letter • Describe the details of the problem • What do you want the seller to do • What will you do if they do nothing

Dear official I am writing to you about my shopping experience ı bought a white
T-shirt
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 at your showroom in the Sanko Park mall
last
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 week I came to your chain in the Sanko Park mall
last
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 week and ı liked it so much your new shop and I am very pleased with the service provided by your staff. Because they are very kind and helpful person.
Firstly
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 when ı saw
this
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T-shirt
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 ı liked so much but ı couldn’t find a suitable size, fortunately, your worker Mrs Merve helped me to find a suitable size and we found it and ı bought it.
then
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 ı the first time ı wore my
T-shirt
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 ı met my friend and that day the weather was rainy when it rained the colour of my
T-shirt
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 faded and ı was sad because ı am so liked my
T-shirt
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. I want help with
this
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 situation if you change my
T-shirt
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 ı would be pleased. İf you do anything ı will not use your shop for shopping in the future I am waiting for your response. Kind regards
That is
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 my bill number:08897613

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to maintain a clear focus in each paragraph to enhance readability. Each idea should be clearly articulated.
Task Achievement
Make sure to correct minor spelling and grammatical errors, as they can distract from your message.
Task Achievement
You included specific details about your shopping experience, which adds a personal touch to your letter.
Task Achievement
Your letter has a polite tone, which is appropriate for a complaint letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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