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Violence in the media promote violent in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that in the modern age , media shows a considerable amount of violence which can affect negatively the behaviour of persons . Some people believe that violent content in the media can increase the level of assault in societies . In my opinion , I totally disagree with
this
 view . On the one hand , it is evident that that programs that show a high level of violence can affect the attitude of individuals ,
such
 as violent movies and video games because the unconscious part of the persons' mind catches up the negative scene , but it is not the major cause of people's aggressive acts , there are other reasons that cause brutality in the community .
On the other hand
 , parents and families have a significant impact on how can act their children in the future . If they ensure a calm environment that contains much love and peace , their children will be not affected by the violent content in the publishing and can choose only the good shows and programs for their futures .
Moreover
 , the individual decides whether to be violent or not. Their attitude, mood and behaviour play crucial roles in encouraging brutality in society. In conclusion , despite that violence in the media can affect sometimes negatively the attitude of individuals , I strongly believe that it remains not the major cause of assault in the community and there are other strong reasons that contribute to
this
 phenomenon .
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