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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing

#growth #shops #towns #cities
Inventions in science and technology have influenced our lifestyles to great extent resulting even in the way we shop. Today, the majority of the population across the world prefer online shopping over shopping from
shops
.
Although
, in small towns, people still prefer offline shopping and
this
 number is decreasing gradually. As
,
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 per a survey conducted by Times magazine it was estimated that the number of customers doing online shopping has double folded in
last
 two years.
This
 poses a serious threat to the local outlets in small localities to a great extent. It is widely believed that these small
shops
 will eventually close. I accord the said statement and will be discussing it in detail in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the
first
 supporting reason to support my point of view is that in today's busy world everyone wants to get all the things of his choice in one place and that too at affordable prices. The items in malls are too expensive.
As a result
, online shopping came into the picture. Needless to say, it not only provides a wide range of products but, it
also
 provides us flexible return and refund policy.
For instance
, websites like Amazon and Flipcart provide anything from clothes, watches, TV's, AC's and so on and that too with a 30-day return policy which is a win-win situation for the buyer. The other supporting reason to support my viewpoint is that these websites
also
 have tie-up with different banks and offer good discounts with a wide range of credit cards and banks. Whereas, it is impossible in offline shopping as they have only limited payment options.
In addition
 to
this
, some of the
shops
also
 deny the returns as it is against their policy. The biggest example of
this
 is the small businessmen in local localities. Overall, we can accumulate the fact that it is sad but true that an online website is more beneficial to the buyer and the number of its users is expected to rise in future resulting in the closure of all
shops
 in towns and cities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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