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All big business should give a percentage of their incomes to charities. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying fact that in every country the economy is largely dependent on big business houses. These organizations not only provide jobs to people but,
also
 represent the states on the global ranking. There is always a debate if these giant corporate houses should share some of their profits in charity. I accord the said statement and respect
this
 idea. The
first
 supporting reason to support my point of view is that these business units have the capability of supporting the needly in the country.
Although
, majority of them make some donations to the political parties and NGO's
that is
 not sufficient enough for society.
For instance
, it is estimated that Reliance makes donations of more than Two million rupees every year.
However
, if we take its turnover into account which is two hundred million it is just like a drop in the ocean. The
second
 supporting reason to support my viewpoint is that if these big billionaires keep helping the privileged people there will be less burden on the government to support these people. Which will help the community to become self-sufficient.
Otherwise
, the gap between the rich and poor will never be filled up. For ,example in some ,countries it is mandatory for the highest taxpayers like Politicians, Actors, Players and Businessmen to give ten per cent of their earnings to charity which has boosted the fundamentals of these regions. I will sump by saying that the day these big organizations start sharing their profits with the needy
this
 world will be a better place to live.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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