Studie suggests that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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state that nowadays a large number of teens choose online socialising above meeting another person in real

life

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essay will explore why

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is the case and what kind of measurements need to be taken to support young people to socialize more in the real

world

. Nowadays,

teenagers

rather socialize online, as it feels more like a

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net for them to interact with other people.

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is because, if they do not like someone or if they are in an awkward situation

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instance, they can easily turn the internet off and move on with their

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in real

life

this

can not be done, they would prefer online socialising.

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, in the online

world

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a lot of information of someone is already on

internet

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For example

teenagers

can easily meet others, who follow the same Facebook page as them. It can be hard to take measurements for

teenagers

, to encourage them to be more active in socialising in real

life

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world

now, the internet is everywhere.

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can help to encourage them.

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, it is important for schools, to organize physical activities, which can not be done online.

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, they could go swimming with their class.

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they have more control of the habits of their child.

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, they could limit the phone usage of their child.

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will

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teenagers

to spend more time with one another in person. In conclusion,

although

many teens rather socialize online, a few

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can be taken to decrease

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amount. So they will spend more time in

this

real

world

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