In most successful companies, some people think that communicaton between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is argued by some that dialogue between co-workers is very important for
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of foundations, while others some people support that other subjects are more important. I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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,
communication
is the most effective thing
on
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for
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corporations
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success. On one hand, there is some believer support that some factors as targets, boss
behavior
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on workers and money are more important than
communication
among collaborators.
However
, money has
good
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effect
in
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our life and
employess
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employees
need that for going on
their
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life,
also
another important issue is boss
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in
company
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a company
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that could cause some good or bad
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on
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the firm lives.
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impact on workers.
For instance
, if bosses or
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companies
give
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goal
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for their career, they could be successful and give themselves on their job.
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this
reason,
companies
will succeed
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financial subjects.
On the other hand
, some experts support that
communication
between employers is
most
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a most
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effective thing on
companies
success. Links of among workers have
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influence on the future of the
compainies
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companies
and that links can establish a bridge quality to
customer
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the customer
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.
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, when people help each other, a group of
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the problem
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problem
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will be dumped, so
poeople
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people
will be happy in their
work life
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and that situation could be reflected on their consumers like quality. In my
oppinion
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opinion
,
communication
is the most important factor for the foundations future come which should be organised from the Human
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Resources
Departmant
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Department
. In conclusion, ı can understand why some people believe the other factors are more important for
companies
success,
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seems to me that links of co-workers have
gorgeous
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impact on
companies
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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