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People are now living much longer lives than before and many feel we should remain in the workforce for longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days exercises play a very important role in our lives. While some people are of the view that going to the gym on a daily basis is not necessary others are of the view that going for walks and having a balanced
diet
 will be more useful. I do not agree that combining occasional exercise and having healthy food is enough to stay fit. There are two primary reasons for
this
.
To begin
 with, staying fit and healthy is becoming very essential. Admittedly, nowadays many people are facing a lot of health-related issues due to a lack of regular workouts.
Moreover
, exercising regularly is necessary as it not only helps to burn out the excess fat from our body but
also
 helps individuals to stay active.
For instance
, a recent study done in India showed that teenagers who regularly went to fitness centres remained fit and did not face any health problems
such
 as heart attack, cholesterol to name a few.
As a result
 of which, health-related issues can be avoided.
Further
 and even more importantly, maintaining a proper
diet
 is important. Human beings may not have the proper knowledge to build a
diet
 plan for themselves and
hence
 require the help of professionals who can assist them with a routine plan to consume the right nutrients.
For example
, cheese is widely consumed in the USA in large amounts,
therefore
 opinions from professionals are important. By way of conclusion, I reaffirm my position that
although
 occasional exercise with a combination of a balanced
diet
 is essential, opinions from health experts is required to avoid health-related ailments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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